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Assessment of Sex Education in the Arab World

Assessment
Thursday, 1 March 2007, 11:09 PM

The Grade is : 1.77 (Maximum grade 3)

 

Element 1:

How well does the introduction get the reader's interest, and describe the topic?

Weight: 1.00

Grade:

Excellent                           Very Poor

Feedback:

I think it is better if you say " With and against" instead of "One is for sex education, while the other party is against it"

 

Element 2:

How well does the thesis make an argument and follow a plan of development within a single sentence?

Weight: 1.00

Grade:

Excellent                           Very Poor

Feedback:

The thesis statement must have a plan of development, not to mention that there are two thesis statements 1)Sex education is an issue which has some ambiguous features especially if taught in the Arab world
2)Public opinion in general and especially that of educated and the scholars is divided into two contradictory parties

 

Element 3:

How well does the body match the thesis and how well does it support the thesis through the use of evidence and specific examples

Weight: 1.00

Grade:

Excellent                           Very Poor

Feedback:

1)Change" Parent" to "Parents"
2) You must tell a story related to the issue

 

Element 4:

How well does the conclusion re-emphasize or summarize key points; reaffirm the thesis and persuasive purpose in writing this essay, and perhaps deliver an appropriate call to action from your readers, or provide a satisfying sense of closure by exploring the implications of the argument in a more global sense.

Weight: 1.00

Grade:

Excellent                           Very Poor

Feedback:

No feeling that I am reading a narration!

 

Element 5:

How good is the grammar and spelling in the draft?

5- Not a single error you can find
4- 1-2 minor errors
3- 1/3 of sentences contain errors
2- 1/2 of sentences contain errors
1- More than 1/2 of sentences contain errors
0- Unreadable

Weight: 1.00

Grade:

Excellent                           Very Poor

Feedback:

Change "every teenager is sexually active and they don’t inform " to "every teenager is sexually active and he/ she doesn't inform "

 

Element 6:

Imagine you are the teacher. Give the draft a grade on a 100 point scale.

Weight: 4.00

Grade:

Feedback:

The purpose of this essay is to write a narration. However, you didn't tell a story about sex education

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